In terms of line thickness, the parts that stand out for me are -
where the neck-chest line dips under the leg and becomes the under-chest line. The first line ends too thin for me to subconsciously believe it continues underneath the leg.
the thickness of the second knee-line
and the top-of-the-butt area. The thickest part of it creates a weird sense of continuation with the tail, in a confusing way. If the bottom edge of that thick line was shaved away a bit, it would work.
I really like the ears; I think the line thinness and treatment there really screams "llama-ear" to me. And its snout-shape and im-too-good-for-you-im-a-llama eye are perfect.
Are you using a brush, and what kind of cleaning-up did you do in photoshop, if any? I don't want my comments to be out of "line" hahaha.
Sorry to mislead you, all the art on here is flash ink lines. Trying to get the hang of it, as flash 'corrects' your linework based on preferences, so im trying for an elegant line.
Funny thing, drew the zebra, dissatisfied with it at the time, drew the llama, pleased with myself at the time, but its clear now the zebra is a better drawing, better composition, and is more popular on my flickr....
The idea of lines being corrected is kind of weird to me. I've sort of got the hang of it in Illustrator (and I usually re-trace every stroke a few times until it looks how I want it to), but haven't really used that in Flash. Do you have a pressure-sensitive tablet? (uh oh, now we're talking about art hardware.) Because the line path is one thing that changes, but there's also the line thickness.
I think maybe that when the lines get out of your control (as in this case, when flash is controlling them), the scratchy and wonky quality of the zebra works better with that, and maybe that's why it's more popular?
it reminds me of a woodcut.
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In terms of line thickness, the parts that stand out for me are -
where the neck-chest line dips under the leg and becomes the under-chest line. The first line ends too thin for me to subconsciously believe it continues underneath the leg.
the thickness of the second knee-line
and the top-of-the-butt area. The thickest part of it creates a weird sense of continuation with the tail, in a confusing way. If the bottom edge of that thick line was shaved away a bit, it would work.
I really like the ears; I think the line thinness and treatment there really screams "llama-ear" to me. And its snout-shape and im-too-good-for-you-im-a-llama eye are perfect.
Are you using a brush, and what kind of cleaning-up did you do in photoshop, if any? I don't want my comments to be out of "line" hahaha.
Youre very right.
ReplyDeleteSorry to mislead you, all the art on here is flash ink lines. Trying to get the hang of it, as flash 'corrects' your linework based on preferences, so im trying for an elegant line.
Funny thing, drew the zebra, dissatisfied with it at the time, drew the llama, pleased with myself at the time, but its clear now the zebra is a better drawing, better composition, and is more popular on my flickr....
The idea of lines being corrected is kind of weird to me. I've sort of got the hang of it in Illustrator (and I usually re-trace every stroke a few times until it looks how I want it to), but haven't really used that in Flash. Do you have a pressure-sensitive tablet? (uh oh, now we're talking about art hardware.) Because the line path is one thing that changes, but there's also the line thickness.
ReplyDeleteI think maybe that when the lines get out of your control (as in this case, when flash is controlling them), the scratchy and wonky quality of the zebra works better with that, and maybe that's why it's more popular?